Director's Commentary: Tried to Defy the Lonely Girl

Today's the day!  I finally get to do/post a "Director's Commentary" of sorts.  I've been wanting to do one of these for a while now as a kind of deeper dive into a written work-- not quite like a self-critique so much as a companion explanation for where, what, and why I did certain things.

 It's been pretty tricky to find a format that accommodates what I want to do with these, and this solution is definitely an imperfect one.  I'm super open to suggestions as to better ways to embed comments into text; the main thing is I just want to avoid having to manually edit the HTML for every single story to integrate the comments as hover text.

But enough of that.  Commentary below!